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Many people believe that keeping livestock has a significant impact on the environment, so government should consider eating meat as an illegal behavior. Others argue, including myself, government should not decide what we can or cannot eat.

The main reason why some people believe eating should be illegal is that keeping livestock produce greenhouse gases, such as carbon dioxide. Those gases cause the rise of temperature and air pollution. However, I would argue that this view of animal husbandry is misguided because there are other factors that have more negative impact on the environment. Industrialization is actually the main causes of producing greenhouse gases, such as the increase in factories and vehicles. If government wanted to improve the environment, they should put more effort on renewable energy or electric vehicles, not banning people from eating meat.

Further, I would argue that government should not decide what we cannot eat like meat because of two reasons. First of all, the unemployment rate will increase since a lot of companies will be forced into bankruptcy, such as animal husbandry and restaurants. In addition, people would need to spend more money getting enough nutrition if government make eating meat illegal. It is well-known that eating meat is the easiest and fastest way to absorb protein, which is an essential nutrient for people’s muscles and bones; therefore, it would be difficult to have a balance diet if we were not allowed to eat meat.

In conclusion, I would say that government should not stop people from eating neat because many people will lose their jobs. Additionally, meat is an important source of protein which brings benefits for people’s health. The fact that keeping livestock has a negative impact on the environment is not a reason to view eating meat as an illegal behavior.

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  1. Very impressive essay. I like that you are using the 70/30 structure + rebuttal. This is an advanced structure, and you use it very well. You also have lots of great vocabulary in this essay and you consistently have very clear topic sentences. Here are some corrections.
    1. Remember “the government”
    2. “put effort into (something)”

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