The three pie charts present the percentage of four different vehicles registered in Norway in 2008, 2018, and an estimate for 2028.
Overall, from 2008 to 2018, there was a downward trend in using petrol vehicles, and an increase trend in fully electric and hybrid vehicles, these trends are expected to continue to 2028. Furthermore, diesel vehicles registered had an increase trend around 2008 and 2018; albeit this trend is projected to have decreased by 2028.
Petrol vehicles was the largest group for registering in 2008, with 69%. However, a significant drop occurred, meaning that only 39% of vehicles registered in 2018. The decrease is expected to continue until 2028, which sees petrol vehicles becoming the least acceptable group, with 11%.
On the other hand, fully electric and hybrid vehicles both saw an increase trend. None of fully electric vehicle registered during 2008. A decade later, there was 4% of fully electric vehicles registered. Similarly view with hybrid vehicles registered. Between 2008 and 2018, it experienced a ten-fold increase (from 1% to 11%). Both fully electric and hybrid vehicles are expected to have increased by 2028 (fully electric up to the top 32%, and hybrid vehicles just below 30%).
Diesel vehicles experienced an fluctuate trend from 2008 (30%) to 2018 (46%), however, it is projected to have a decrease by 2028(27%).
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Nice Zheng Li????
+ Very clear introduction
+ Clear overview, you take into account all of the categories- well done.
+ Lots of good vocabulary: albeit, decade, ten-fold increase, etc.
+ Some very nice grammar: Both fully electric and hybrid vehicles are expected to have increased by 2028
– The structure is unclear. Your first body paragraph looks at petrol vehicles and then your second body paragraph looks at all of the other vehicle types. This would lower your score for Coherence and Cohesion
– Some of your vocabulary is unclear. For example, “the least acceptable group, with 11%.” maybe “least popular” would be more appropriate than “least acceptable”
Thank you Eli, it’s really helpful feedback and advice. Actually, I have three body paragraph, the first talked about petrol, the second talked about fully electric and hybrid vehicles, and the last paragraph talked about diesel. I think the last one is too short to make misunderstand, right? Maybe I should write it longer? I tried to structure different sentences to make sure my writing “interesting “, but sometimes its really confused me. And I’m afraid I won’t have enough time to complete writing, I just try to think more and write more when i was practicing.
Ah, I see. It’s a good idea to look at how you can group categories into paragraphs. In this case, you can group renewable and non-renewable energy sources into separate paragraphs.
Regarding making your writing “interesting”, it’s good to vary the sentence structures you use. However, you should make sure that they are structures that you know are correct and you can use accurately. I hope this helps.