Examiner Comments
- The report provides a clear and accurate summary of both charts, addressing the distribution of class venues as well as the participation of two age groups in three dance styles.
- The introduction paraphrases the task effectively, and the overview highlights the main trends: the dominance of private studios and the contrasting preferences between younger and older learners.
- All key figures are reported accurately, with appropriate detail given for each venue type and each age group.
- The writer avoids unnecessary interpretation and focuses solely on the information provided, fulfilling the requirements of the task.
- The report follows a logical and well-structured format, with the overview placed appropriately after the introduction.
- Information is grouped sensibly: venues are described together, and dance-style participation is handled in a dedicated paragraph.
- Cohesive devices are used effectively to compare data points and to signal contrasts, for example “compared with,” “whereas,” and “the next most common.”
- Paragraphing is clear and logical, which helps the reader follow the information easily.
- The vocabulary range is strong and well-suited to describing visual data, with precise expressions such as “account for the largest share,” “represent a further 18%,” and “shows the opposite pattern.”
- The writer demonstrates flexible paraphrasing of key terms, avoiding repetition of phrases like “dance classes” and “students.”
- Word choice is consistently formal and appropriate for an academic report.
- A wide range of grammatical structures is used with a high degree of accuracy, including comparative forms and complex sentences.
- Figures are presented correctly, and prepositions with percentages and age groups are handled well.
- The writing maintains grammatical control throughout, contributing to a clear, concise, and fluent description.
Useful Vocabulary
Clearly different from something else.
In addition, the two age groups show distinct preferences: younger children tend to take ballet, while older learners are more inclined towards modern dance.
To be more likely to prefer or choose something.
In addition, the two age groups show distinct preferences: younger children tend to take ballet, while older learners are more inclined towards modern dance.
Concerning or regarding something.
In relation to where classes are conducted, private studios account for the largest share at 48%.
To form or represent a particular amount or proportion of something.
In relation to where classes are conducted, private studios account for the largest share at 48%.
To form a particular part or proportion of a whole.
The next most common location is school halls used after regular hours, which make up 24% of the total.
Fixed at or measured at a particular amount.
Community and other halls represent a further 18%, leaving college-based studios as the least used setting at just 10%.
To the same degree or amount.
Tap classes are almost equally popular among the two groups, drawing around 440 under-11s and about 410 students aged 11–16.
Attracting or bringing in people.
Tap classes are almost equally popular among the two groups, drawing around 440 under-11s and about 410 students aged 11–16.
