Regular exams have been an essential part of learning in secondary school. As a result, there is an argument as to whether exams are valuable to teenage students after finishing school. While some people argue that it will do more harm than good, my position is that examinations are the music every student has to face.
Giving exams frequently can be beneficial to the students. It will help them build some skills that will help them in their future.The things that they learn in school are not only useful for scoring in academic test, but are also knowledge that will come in handy after they finish school. Examinations should be seen as information and feedback for improvement. It is also a way to give you an indication of where you are now, and assess your self how much you need to adjust to reach your goal or find your best fit- and maybe to choose an ideal career. For example, if there’s a gadget that would tell you how much distance you missed the net by when you kick the soccer ball, you could use that information to assess your self on how well you play or use it to adjust your shot.
Some people contend that by taking the exams, students are learning for the sake of passing the class, receiving an “A” grade, etc; and defeats the purpose of learning for the sake of knowledge. Also, it has been said that students suffer from the consequences of stress and anxiety from the preparation for the test. Although true to a certain extent, it is also important to know how individuals perform under pressure. Students should learn a proper time management so that they would not feel stress. In fact, In the future, some work (and everything that academic test and assessment prepares the student for) is generally thought to be very stressful.
In the end, I would say examinations are important for high school students in order for them to study hard, develop a skills, learn to compete with others, assess own’s strength and step into a high position.
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Great essay Dayanara ????
+ Nice clear introduction.
+ Good position. Although make sure that it is exactly relevant to the question- saying that teenagers have to do exams is not the same as saying that you agree that exams are good for their post-school life.
+ Lots of good grammar and vocabulary.
+ Logical arguments.
+ I like your analogy with soccer- clever way to give an example.
– Your conclusion introduces new ideas that are not in your body paragraph (in my opinion): “learn to compete with others” and “step into a high position”. Make sure that your conclusion simply restates the ideas that you have developed in your body paragraphs.
– Try to avoid using the same word multiple times in the same sentence. For example, here you repeat the phrase “will help them build”: “will help them build some skills that will help them”. You can change this to “It will help them build certain skills that will be beneficial in their future”.
– Make sure that all of your ideas are fully developed. Most of your ideas are fully developed. However, your idea about “learning for the sake of passing the class” could be more developed. For a band 7+, all of your ideas have to be well developed. Make sure that each idea has at least two sentences. A good way to do this is to give details or an example.
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Hey Dayanara
Nice answer!
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