The essay begins with a clear thesis statement, expressing the author’s belief that a university should serve both roles, preparing students for work and providing education.

The use of concrete examples, such as the illustration of medical studies in the UK, adds specificity and supports the arguments, making them more persuasive.

The essay maintains a balanced perspective, acknowledging the diversity of student goals and the varying nature of university studies based on different majors and student requirements.

All points are fully explained and supported well with effective examples.

Cohesive devices are used naturally and effectively in this essay.

Ideas flow logically throughout the essay and paragraphing is organized well.

The essay is organized into well-structured paragraphs, each addressing a specific aspect of the topic. This contributes to the overall coherence of the essay.

The introduction addresses the topic and states the writer’s view clearly.  Main points are stated.

This essay contains a wide range of appropriate vocabulary which is used accurately and naturally and demonstrates a sophisticated control of language. There are no spelling errors.

Some examples of advanced vocabulary are:

A topic for debate: Whether or not a university’s main purpose should be to prepare students for work or simply to provide education has long been a topic for debate.

Accordingly:  For example, young people who wish to become doctors, architects, or lawyers will expect their university years to lead them into their working life and university courses are organized accordingly.

A specialised area: An undergraduate degree in medicine in the UK, for instance, would take five to six years to complete and is usually followed by some form of post graduate study in a specialised area

A calling: On the other hand, at a young age, people often do not have such a calling…

Highly motivated:  These students are often highly motivated and love to study,

This essay uses a very wide range of both complex and simple appropriate grammar structures which help to convey ideas with clarity and precision.

Complex sentence structure: Many students go to university for the sake of getting the necessary education and qualifications to follow a certain career path.

Correlative conjunction: Whether or not a university’s main purpose should be to prepare students for work or simply to provide education has long been a topic for debate.

Precise punctuation: An undergraduate degree in medicine in the UK, for instance, would take five to six years to complete and is usually followed by some form of postgraduate study in a specialized area.

Parallel structure: Although some young people enroll in university with a particular career already mapped out, others do not know what the future will bring and are eager to follow their passions with their choice of major.

Sophisticated parallel structure: On the other hand, at a young age, people often do not have such a calling and can be uncertain about their future careers.