The table illustrates information on the proportion of respondents drinking soft drinks every day in a period of 7 days in 2019 among England, Scotland, Wales, and Northern Ireland.
Overall, Scotland had the highest percentage of respondents who drank soft drink while the smallest proportion of people who consumed soft drink could be found in Northern Ireland. Coca-cola was the most popular soft drink among three countries: England, Wales, and Northern Ireland. However, the most attractive soft drink in Scotland was Irn-Bru.
Concerning the quantity of people who drank soft drinks, Scotland registered the highest percentage, which was over a half of the total respondents. The second highest percentage was observed in Wales, at 45%. When compared to Wales, there was 5% less respondents drinking soft drink in England; only 39% of respondents who drank soft drinks in Northern Ireland.
With regard to the kind of soft drinks they chose, coca-cola was the most frequently consumed drink: 16% in England, 20% in Wales, and 18% in Northern Ireland. Irn-Bru, which was the least popular drink in England and Northern Ireland (4% and 3%, respectively), attracted almost a quarter of the respondents in Scotland. By contrast, only a minority of people in Scotland drank Sprite (4%); and the least attractive drink in Wales was Fanta (5%).
Very nice Fion! 👏
+ Clear introduction
+ Ideal overview
+ Good topic sentences
+ Good use of brackets and non-defining relative clauses
– Remember to use fewer with countable nouns (e.g. “fewer respondents”)
– This sentence would make more sense as two separate sentences: “When compared to Wales, there was 5% less respondents drinking soft drink in England; only 39% of respondents who drank soft drinks in Northern Ireland.”
– When you use a semicolon, you don’t need a connecting word. For example, in this sentence, you don’t need “and”: “Sprite (4%); and the least attractive drink in Wales was Fanta (5%).”
Nice Fion, you mentioned all the key features.