This letter effectively communicates the writer’s request for a uniform policy change, and it maintains a polite and respectful tone.

The letter is clear, concise, and gets straight to the point, making it easy for the reader to understand the request.

The purpose of writing the letter is stated clearly and all bullet points are well developed.

The tone used is consistently polite and appropriate for a semi-formal letter.

Appropriate cohesive devices are used effectively in this letter.

The letter is arranged into distinct paragraphs and ideas flow logically.

Throughout the letter, the writer uses a wide range of linking words naturally which helps the reader follow the ideas.

This letter contains a wide range of appropriate vocabulary which is used accurately and naturally and demonstrates a sophisticated control of language. There are no spelling errors.

Some examples of advanced vocabulary are:

Positively received: On the whole, last week’s introduction of new uniforms has been positively received and I, along with many other colleagues, love the vibrant purple colour and the freedom to accessorise as we wish.

Causing concern: There is, however, one aspect that is causing concern.

Freedom of choice: Aside from the discomfort this causes, it is also robbing us of our freedom of choice.

Raising staff morale: I believe this would contribute to raising staff morale as we would feel more respected.  

This letter uses a very wide range of both complex and simple appropriate grammar structures which help to convey ideas with clarity and precision.

• Complex sentence structure: I find it rather distressing that women are being forced to wear a skirt, even in the cold and windy months of winter.
• Participial phrase: Imposing different dress codes for male and female employees creates an unequal working environment.
• Conditional sentence: I’d be grateful if you would consider improving this situation…
• Modal verbs for politeness: I’d be grateful if you would consider…