The process diagram provides information about how to produce a bottle of wine. Overall, there are 8 steps in this process, beginning with picking grapes and processing, and culminating in supermarket. Residual waste is produced in three different stages.
Firstly, 400 grapes, which are picked, need to wait for those to ripe. In this stage, grapes can produce 3000ml of grape juices and also the residual waste, which is sent to be composted. After juices have been made, those juices need to ferment for 2 weeks.
After fermentation, ripe grapes have been sent to be pressed. In this stage, waste is composted and liquid has sent to be filtered. Filter system is also produce waste to be composted. The filtered liquid is left in barrels for a period of time before the wine is bottled. Finally, once the wine has been bottle, which contains 750ml in a single bottle, it is sent to supermarket to be sold.
Very good answer. Your introduction and overview are very good (although they should be in separate paragraphs) and your body paragraphs clearly divide the different stages of the process. You have also used the passive form very well. This is a great sentence: “The filtered liquid is left in barrels for a period of time before the wine is bottled.”
Here are some tips:
1. Put your introduction and overview in separate paragraphs.
2. Be careful when you use articles. Remember, use “the” when referring to a specific thing.
In this stage, THE grapes can produce 3000ml of grape juice
After THE juices have been made
After fermentation, THE ripe grapes are sent
In this stage, waste is composted and THE liquid
THE filter system also produces
it is sent to THE supermarket to be sold.