There is no doubt that these days shopping has a variety of different shapes, and the online shop became more popular in many of societies. so the question is, is shopping online a good alternative instead of shop around? In this essay I’m going to count the benefits and draw my personal conclusion.
One of the biggest disadvantage is that people don’t trust the applications for shopping. As a result, they cannot purchase without touch the materials or see them as a reality. This is because they like to observe every things before they buy it. for instance, a lot of mothers advise their teenagers to avoid online shopping. However, recently these days all applications have a serious description to set all details which relate to the products. Even the international size part for clothing, This means that, they do a best to make their products too familiar for a buyer.
In terms of advantages are that online shopping make our live much easier than before with a simple process. for example, everyone has an opportunity to buy anything interest with directly in a short time. In addition, most of online stores for clothes are not cost as much as stores, because you buy it from the owner directly. for instance, if the buyer look for in Ali Express application can see the same product with a cheap price.
to conclude, although, there is a negative side of use the online shopping instead of shopping around, the online shopping still better and its be more popular with a specially features through the time
Hey Wedyan, 😀
Good attempt at a difficult question.
+ Good linking words
+ Good structure
+ Good use of topic sentences
+ Lots of good vocabulary
– In your introduction, don’t simply say “In this essay I’m going to count the benefits and draw my personal conclusion.”- you should give your opinion.
– You have slightly misunderstood the question. The question is not asking you about the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping; It is asking you about the advantages and disadvantages of online shops replacing physical stores. In IELTS, this is an important distinction and would stop you from getting above a band 5 for Task Achievement.
– Remember to put a capital letter at the beginning of a new sentence.