Many people have the view that setting up large roads in the city center would be the primal method of cutting off travel time between the home and the workplace. By contrast, others, including myself, believe that there are other viable options to ameliorate this problem.
A number of proponents consider that commuting time can be cut short by creating wide roads intersecting the cities. They cite that it only takes a good flow of funding from the government in order to accomplish the task. In my perspective, while this seems to be a practical and a fast track solution, it could, however, exacerbate traffic issues, especially in mega cities. This means that widening roads encourages even more cars to occupy them, thus, adding up to the problem of congestion.
On the other side of the issue are those who take the position that there are other ways to overcome the lengthy travelling hours to work. One of these ways could be exploring possible routes from the city center to various places where people dwell. In this situation, commuters are presented with many probable routes without experiencing traffic jams in the main roads and would substantially ease congestion. Another, feasible solution could be constructing bicycle lanes for those who prefer to use bike. In Denmark, where traffic jams are rare occurrences, roads of large and small cities alike, have bicycle lanes. Furthermore, this would not only be beneficial to the environment (as people opting for bikes means lesser carbon emissions) but even more so to people´s health.
Overall, although the construction of huge roads that goes through the city might be a probable solution to lessen commuting time, it seems advisable to explore other plausible ways such as bypassing the main roads by creating different travel routes and building special road infrastructure like bicycle lanes.
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Nice essay Noemi ????
+ Very nice introduction- clear and to the point.
+ Very nice rebuttal- clearly showing the difference between their opinion and your own.
+ Great topic sentences
+ Lots of good vocabulary
+ All of your ideas are well developed and the example of Denmark is great.
+ Great linking words. I especially like “In this situation” as it clearly shows the development of your idea
– A few problems with phrasal verbs: cutting off travel time – cutting down travel time, adding up to the problem of congestion – adding to the problem of congestion.
– Some small stylistic changes: to use bike – to travel by bike, even more so to people’s health – even more so for people’s health
– For task 2, it’s better to use “In conclusion” or “To conclude”, instead of “overall”
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