Nowadays, it is very common that people get stuck in the traffic at rush hour. Many people believe that expanding roads can solve the congestion, and people can spend less time on travelling to work. Others argue, including myself, there should have others ways which are much more effective to reduce the time.
It is understandable that some people say that having larger road is a way for people travelling to work to save the time. Firstly, larger roads mean that more vehicles are allowed to do through the road at the same time, which can save people’s time. If the roads are enlarged, the rate of car accidents will be lower; therefore, we can reduce the risk of congestion. However, I would argue that the idea of larger roads is misguided since pedestrians and vehicles require more time to cross the road, meaning that drivers need to wait for longer time. In addition, larger roads also provide higher risks for the elder and children, who don’t have enough strength, can be easily stuck in the middle of the road, resulting in wasting drivers’ time.
Furthermore, I would argue that there are plenty of solutions, which are more efficient and least risky. First of all, government should encourage citizens to use the different type of transportations, such as, buses and cycling. If government is able to provide polish and refined public transport systems, which citizens are willing to use, the problem of traffic jams will be solved. Additionally, building completed cycling lanes is also a useful solution which can overcome the congestion at rush hour. Secondly, many people waste their time on finding car spaces while causing chaos on the road. Creating more car spaces and parking areas are also the efficient way to save time for people, who spending their time on travelling to work.
In conclusion, I would argue that providing a good public transport system and adequate parking spaces are the effective way to reduce the time that citizens spend on travelling to work. Larger roads are not a proper way to solve this difficulty since it would cause more problems.
Very impressive essay Judy. Clear position, clear structure, clear topic sentences, clear discourse markers, clear rebuttal, clear conclusion. Well done!
Here are some grammar tips for you:
1. “there are other ways which are much more effective at reducing the time”
2. “Firstly, larger roads mean that more vehicles are allowed to pass through the road at the same time”
3. “larger roads also create higher risks for the elderly and children”
Well done! I can see you have used some structures which are taught in the lesson! Add oil:)