Examiner Comments
This is an excellent response to the question as all parts of the task have been addressed in full and the writer’s position is very clear and well developed throughout.
The essay presents two reasons for disagreeing with the essay statement about job satisfaction and one point of agreement.
All points are fully explained and supported well with great use of examples which are relevant to the question.
The writer acknowledges the validity of the belief that salary is important for job satisfaction, but states clearly throughout the essay that they think other factors are more important.
Cohesive devices are used naturally in this essay to the extent that they do not draw attention.
Ideas flow logically throughout the essay, and distinct paragraphs are used well.
The introduction announces the topic and states the writer’s view that there are other things than salary that contribute to job satisfaction.
The first two body paragraphs contain clear topic sentences which state the main points contribute to job satisfaction.
The third body paragraph acknowledges that salary can be important and gives good examples as to why.
The conclusion summarises the main points clearly and confirms the writer’s view.
Throughout the essay, the writer uses a wide range of linking words naturally which helps the reader follow the ideas easily.
This essay contains a wide range of topic-specific vocabulary which is used accurately and naturally and demonstrates a sophistication in control of language. There are no spelling errors.
Some examples of advanced vocabulary are:
Sense of fulfilment: I strongly believe that being passionate about our work and working with meaning gives us a much stronger sense of fulfilment in our work and our lives in general.
Colleagues: People who work in offices with demanding or selfish managers and uncooperative colleagues tend to report much higher levels of stress, illness and dissatisfaction in their jobs
Prioritise: Many people prioritise financial security and all that it offers in life.
To tolerate: The feelings of pleasure or contentment arising from this, amounts to job satisfaction for a large number of people and it helps them to tolerate a less than perfect work environment.
Paramount: In conclusion, although it is paramount for many people to have a well-paid job in order to feel satisfied at work, there are many others for whom this is not the case.
This essay uses a very wide range of both complex and simple appropriate grammar structures with a very high degree of accuracy.
- Complex sentences: There are others, however, who believe that to be happy in life, we should live our life with meaning and find a job that gives us a sense of purpose and work in a positive work environment.
- Modal Verbs: , we should live our life with meaning.
- Comparative and superlative forms: . The stronger the passion we have for our job, the higher the level of satisfaction experienced.
- Subordinate Clause: . Furthermore, when a job involves helping others…..
Useful Vocabulary
“Sense of fulfilment” refers to the feeling of satisfaction, accomplishment, or contentment that one experiences when achieving a goal, realizing a purpose, or engaging in meaningful activities that align with their values or desires.
I strongly believe that these factors lead to a much stronger sense of fulfilment in our work and our lives in general.
“Job satisfaction” means feeling happy and content with one’s work.
People who feel passionate about their work, tend to report higher feelings of job satisfaction and commonly experience higher levels of motivation and energy.
“Sense of well-being” refers to a feeling of overall happiness, comfort, and contentment with one’s life and current state of being. It encompasses emotional, physical, and psychological aspects, indicating a state of positive health and happiness.
Furthermore, when a job involves helping others, such as that of a doctor, lawyer or teacher, a strong sense of purpose in life can be achieved, leading to an overall sense of well-being.
A “contributory factor” is something that helps cause a result.
Another contributory factor to overall job satisfaction, is to work in a positive and friendly environment.
“Uncooperative” describes someone who is not willing to work together or assist others, often being resistant or not following through with requests or expectations.
People who work in offices with demanding or selfish managers and uncooperative colleagues tend to report much higher levels of stress and dissatisfaction in their jobs than those who work in happier atmospheres with supportive colleagues.
“Dissatisfaction” refers to the feeling of discontent or unhappiness with a situation, circumstance, or experience.
People who work in offices with demanding or selfish managers and uncooperative colleagues tend to report much higher levels of stress and dissatisfaction in their jobs than those who work in happier atmospheres with supportive colleagues.
“Hence” means as a result or therefore. It is used to indicate the reason for a conclusion or the next step in a sequence of events.
Hence, it is always worth trying to cultivate a great working atmosphere.
“Despite” means without being affected by or in spite of. It is used to indicate that something happens or is true even though there might be challenges, opposition, or contrary conditions.
Despite the apparent benefits of the above points, there remain a large number of individuals who believe that earning a good salary is the most important factor for job satisfaction.
“Prioritise” means to arrange or deal with something in terms of its importance or urgency, focusing on what is most important or pressing.
Many people prioritise financial security while also appreciating things like foreign travel, a good quality education for their children and the ability to purchase luxury items.
“To tolerate” means to allow or accept something, especially behaviour or opinions, even if one does not agree with or approve of them. It involves enduring or putting up with certain situations, actions, or individuals without taking strong action against them.
The feelings of contentment arising from this, amounts to job satisfaction for a large number of people and it helps them to tolerate a less than perfect work environment.
“Paramount” means of utmost importance or significance; supreme or dominant in importance or influence.
In conclusion, although it is paramount for many people to have a well-paid job in order to feel satisfied at work, there are many others for whom this is not the case.
