Examiner Comments
- The response addresses all the bullet points clearly, including the reason for requesting a reduction in working hours, the proposed new schedule, and the potential benefits to the employer.
- The purpose of the letter is stated clearly in the opening paragraph, and the tone remains consistent throughout.
- Each point is developed with relevant detail, such as the time demands of the course and the specific working pattern requested.
- The explanation of how the course will benefit the workplace is appropriate and supported with a clear example.
- The letter is logically organised, with a clear progression from the purpose of the request to supporting details and justification.
- Each paragraph has a clear focus, corresponding to a specific aspect of the task.
- Cohesive devices are used effectively to link ideas and show relationships, particularly when explaining cause and result.
- Paragraphing is consistent and contributes to the overall clarity of the message.
- A suitable range of formal vocabulary is used to express the request and explain the situation, including phrases such as reduce my working hours, significant time commitment, and manage alongside my current working hours.
- Repetition is avoided through the use of varied expressions and paraphrasing.
- Word choice is precise and appropriate for a formal workplace context.
- A range of sentence structures is used accurately, including complex sentences that express cause, condition, and purpose.
- Modal verbs and polite request forms are used effectively to maintain a formal tone.
- The writing is error-free, with a high level of grammatical control throughout.
Useful Vocabulary
Large or important.
I am writing to ask whether it would be possible to reduce my working hours, as I have recently started a part-time course in counselling and it involves a significant time commitment.
Quite large in size, amount, or degree.
This course means I have to attend workshops at weekends, as well as complete a considerable amount of research during the week.
Happening often and repeatedly over time.
Furthermore, I also have to find time for written assignments on a regular basis.
Used to show that something happens because of what was said before.
As a result, I am finding this difficult to manage alongside my current working hours.
To make it possible for someone to do something.
I believe this would enable me to remain fully focused and productive during my working days.
To stay at the same level and not fall behind.
I believe this would enable me to remain fully focused and productive during my working days, while helping me to keep up with my course requirements.
Especially or more than usual in a specific situation.
I believe these skills would benefit my work, particularly when dealing with clients and managing workplace interactions more successfully.
Helpful and focused on improving a situation.
I have become more confident when dealing with dissatisfied clients, as I am more able to listen carefully and respond in a calm and constructive way.
Feeling thankful and appreciative for something.
I would be grateful if you would consider my request and would be happy to discuss this further.
