I have decided to tell you the sport of golf which is usually played outdoor by the professional golfer and wealthy businessmen. Since I was a kid, I have been dreaming to try out this sport. I know for a fact that I cannot afford to play golf unless there is someone who can sponsor me as this is the sport for the rich people. If my bosom friend of mine who works in Manila Golf Club can accomodate me on my vacation, I will be over the moon. We have been talking about the different equipments needed to play golf. Basically, we need golf clubs or the stick, ball, tees, markers and golf bag. Each golfer have their own stuff and all of it are expensive to buy. I have to splash out of my money if I have a plan to indulge myself to this sport. To play with, I have to maintain a good body posture and need to estimate the distance so we can shoot the ball in the hole. It is kinda tough to play this sport especially when we are beginner as it needs more focus and determination. In the future, if I have the chance to play golf, I will take advantage to learn the basics, enjoy the ambiance of playing in the golf course and have some photos with the professional golfer. By and large, playing golf is one of a kind opportunity that everyone must try.
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Very nice- I hope you get a chance to play. I’ve never played but it is very popular in Scotland- where I grew up.
Some small corrections:
– “by professional golfers”
“dreaming about/of trying this sport”
“bosom friend”- what does that mean?
“golf club”- not “stick”
“take photos with professional golfers”
Alright Sir Eli. Is there anything i can do more to increase my band score higher than 7? I saw that you had given me 7 Sir? Any piece of advice?
The mistakes that I pointed out would stop you from getting above 7.
Your right Sir. I do admit that I’m weak at grammars. I have been trying my best to learn from my mistakes. Thanks Sir.
Your grammar is good. It’s a great idea to learn from your mistakes- that’s why I’m here! Remember, IELTS examiners have been English teachers for many years and can hear mistakes immediately. These activities will help you improve your accuracy. Good luck!