Opinions differ regarding gun ownership by public, with some arguing that citizens should have the right to keeping firearms in order to secure their own security and families.
The first and foremost concern is the safety when it comes to weapon ownership. This is because when individuals have freedom to access wide range of arms, the chances of using these weapons for wrong intentions are much more higher. For example, if the person who is bearing a gun is psychologically disturbed, they are more prone to commit suicide as a result. It is a well known fact that many of suicidal deaths have been related to the their own weapons, which is an unfortunate consequence of keeping the firearms licensed or unlicensed. Nevertheless, bearing these kinds of weapons have given rise to many incidents of mass shooting and homicides, leaving the community in danger with no choice. If the government had taken the measures to control the gun possession, the security of the public would have not been hurt. Take United States of America as an example where many deaths and injuries have been reported related to firearms, especially in the cosmopolitan areas which has been popular with notorious criminals and gangs who possess the illegal weapons . These pieces of information clearly shows that unauthorized weapons can be lethal to societal order if the states do not impose the rules and regulations related to bear arms.
Another major concern associated with uncontrolled weapons is that freedom of guns has fuled animal poaching. This is simply because people have the authority to harm animals and sell them when free flow of weapons is ubiquitous. Elephant and rhino poachers in Africa is one of great examples in which intensity of dying out rare animal species has clearly demonstrated. If the trend of improper use of guns is continuing, the chances of losing endangered animals would be inenvitable and this will pose a greater threat to the integrity of biodiversity. These evidence strongly support that guns should be banned by authorities .
In conclusion, I strongly believe that having right to bear arms by individuals could bring about irreversible damages. Not only does this harm the social fabric in terms of security, this causes disturbances to existance of animals who are at the verge of extinction.
Very nice essay Deepika. You have a lot of very good vocabulary. I particularly like the collocations “the right to keep firearms”, “bear a gun”, “commit suicide”, “harm the social fabric”, “endangered animals” “weapon ownership”, “verge of extinction”, “free flow of weapons”. This is all band 8+ vocabulary.
There are a few grammar mistakes that lower your score.
1. “Opinions differ regarding gun ownership by public” – “Opinions differ regarding public ownership of guns”
2. “the right to keeping firearms” – “the right to keep firearms”
3. “have freedom to access wide range of arms” – “have the freedom to access a wide range of firearms”
4. “are much more higher” – “are much higher”
5. “many of suicidal deaths have been related to the their own weapons” – “many suicides have been related to the ownership of weapons”
I am bitterly disappointed with my silly grammar mistakes, particularly the ones with articles. Thanks for the corrections sir Eli.
Nothing to be bitterly disappointed by. This is a great essay!
Thanks Sir Eli for encouraging me!